Unsmiling Eyes (haiku)
Crow's feet and front teeth
Wide smile and all the right lines
But unsmiling eyes
posted by Robert Frust at 6:25 PM
Friday, September 29, 2006
Wide smile and all the right lines
But unsmiling eyes
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3 Comments:
Nice attempt. Even though it fits the 5-7-5 meter, it appears contrived to me. I personally feel that metering is not natural to English language.
29/9/06 9:16 PM
"Crow's feet and front teeth
Wide smile and all the right lines"
I can't move past those lines..
19/10/06 10:25 PM
[tapasya] I love it! :D Haiku seem contrived at first, imho you have to let the style grow on you.
[kd] They're my favourite lines too, and not just because there's only one more. Nobody understands art.
20/10/06 4:56 PM
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